Minggu, 21 Oktober 2012

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{ACC2} The World Entertainment of Music Parody 


Nobody do not know about music. Music is very famous in the world, everyone like music. And know, many people have created the new creations in the world of music. Over time many increasing of the music types. One of them is the music parody. This type just to amuse everyone.


Many people create the music parody from their own creativity. This music just to joke, it can make everyone entertained. And than, with help of the internet many people can be know about their attainments. So, they are can be famous in the world of entertainment. They can get a job and money.

But, in other side this way people can easily get into the world of entertainment. Without see their singing talent, just relay a joke and appearance. But, the things like this will not last long because many people can be bored.

          In conclusion, everyone can be creative about music. It can make the music types increase in the entertainment. The most important, the musical parody can make everyone be happy and enjoy .




-please give me comments and my mistake
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4 komentar:

  1. Hanny Nifah21 Oktober 2012 pukul 18.27

    It's a good topic..

    But, I want to ask you, what do you mean with this sentence "And know, many people had created with music."
    Please explain.. :D ^_-

    BalasHapus
  2. Unknown22 Oktober 2012 pukul 06.14

    thx, for your respons and tell me about my mistake,
    it have a lack. that should many people have created the new creations in the world of music. so, with their creativity, they can make many the music types in the world of music entertainment.

    BalasHapus
  3. Reni Dwi Wahyuning Tyas22 Oktober 2012 pukul 13.30

    I think your article is so good !
    And I agree with you ! Because, there are some people say that music is my life. :)

    BalasHapus
  4. Unknown2 November 2012 pukul 15.44

    i agree with you saphira, but maybe there are some mistakes that i will correct here:
    1. And than = and then (maybe you were tired and couldn't type well)
    2. hmm talk about "can" word, you write a lot of "can" in your writing, in Indonesian language, it is acceptable, but in English sometimes we should delete and write the sentence without using "can". Just be simple one, for ex: it make everyone entertained, they are will be famous, music parody will make everyone...
    3. the sentence: people can be know about...
    can+v1 (be) is correct
    be+know(v1) is incorrect, maybe if be+known(v3) is acceptable, maybe you wanna write passive form, right?
    but here, there are two verb in your sentence, can and know? maybe it will be better if it is people will know or people know

    BalasHapus

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